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Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education. Why do people do this? Would you consider doing this yourself and why?

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,
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university
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the university
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 is one of the factors that every company need to concern
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 there are candidates for the open position. The ranking of
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university
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the university
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 has played an essential role in
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 of quality for the graduate. So, that
make
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 many people concern
the
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 ranking, some decide to go abroad to the
other
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another
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country
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 because they want to graduate from a high-ranking
university
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.
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those who go abroad for their education might see that the higher ranking, the better opportunity to work with high reputation enterprise. Many companies with
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reputation
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reputations
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 will review
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the profile
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profile
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profiles
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 of those who graduate from high-ranking universities
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,
then
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 move on to the lower ranking and so on. And,
also
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study
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 abroad is a
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lifetime
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life time
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lifetime
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chance
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 that it might not happen again. It is a
chance
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 that we can live in
other
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another country
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country
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 to learn
their
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 cultures, lives and to make us grow up and shape ours view to be less narrow than before. In my opinion, if I have a
chance
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, I would take it because it means that I will have an opportunity to gain a unique experience outside my
country
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. And it
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clearly
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 that if I decide to
study
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 abroad, I can
study
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 what I want with
a
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the
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 unique knowledge that a high-ranking
university
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provide
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 for me.
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, I can explore the world to see the difference between cultures,
that
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 can make me choose which
country
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 I want to live
.
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in.
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 In summary,
study
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 abroad is a perfect
chance
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 for people to work with high reputation companies, and it will make us gains some experience that if we stay in
ours
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country
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, we would not gain
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apply
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