Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. But others think taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In today's time, playing
sports
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has become a social event.
Alot
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A lot
of us are meeting new people through sporting events and group lessons. But it can
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be a distraction from the sport itself and playing
solo
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would be the way to go. In
this
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essay, I am going to explore both views and suggest why taking part in
team
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sports
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is beneficial. To start with, playing
team
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sports
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like football, cricket has its own righteous benefits to humans in
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of higher morale and
support
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.
For instance
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, a cricket player is always a part of a
team
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that helps him navigate through his fitness regime, injuries, emotional
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and
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social
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a social
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setting.
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more, the
team
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always keep each other motivated to keep pushing forward through mutual understanding and co-operation leading to
long lasting
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friendships.
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, playing
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sports
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like swimming
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reaps huge rewards to the extend of efforts put in
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solo
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member.
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,
a
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individual who is
competeting
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competing
in swimming competitions will be successful only if he performs better at a given time.
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, the
indiviual
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individual
has to rely on himself for
support
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and motivation. He can be victorious by his
hardwoprk
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hard work
and be known for it without giving anyone else a share in his triumph. In conclusion, playing
sports
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in general
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has its own benefit be it
solo
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or in a
team
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.
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plethora
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a plethora
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of people might think that playing
solo
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is beneficial. I
belevie
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believe
team
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sports
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has added benefits that help us with more
support
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and boost
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our
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are
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our
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confidence.
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