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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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Undoubtedly, hard
work
 is a key to success due to which, some
people
 contribute with greater efforts in their studies and
work
 in comparison to others. In my opinion, continuous workload whether it is for educational or job purposes will have detrimental effects which will be justified in the following paragraphs along with the reasons
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such
 dedication. There are several reasons
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 working harder.
First
 and foremost, it helps
people
 to achieve their goals. In
this
 competitive world, working harder enables an individual to earn more money and provides wider career opportunities including promotional rewards and higher wages than others.
As a result
,
people
 can enjoy higher social status and luxurious
lifestyle
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.
For example
,
Indian
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the Indian
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 government recognizes NREGA
laborers
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 who owner
hard-
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work
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additional financial support in order to improve their living standards.
Secondly
, it leads to
self development
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. A person has to face various challenges
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make them
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overcome the difficulties and excel in a particular area of their interest by making them diligent towards their passion.
However
, extensive
work
 can lead to physical or metabolic disorders. If
people
 are over-indulged
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 their
work
 or study, they would avoid having
proper
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 diet.
Consequently
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 it may cause serious
illness
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illnesses
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 like hypertension and diabetes.
For instance
, a friend of mine had suffered
through
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 chronic low blood pressure as he started skipping his dinner due to working overtime.
Moreover
, overwork disturbs
the
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social relationships. It does not allow
people
 to spend
their
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quality time with their family or to attend any social gatherings. Continuous
work
 burden without having any break which can possibly lead to acute stress syndrome. It is evident that the couples who
work
 longer hours tend to have
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attention towards each other which creates several misunderstandings. Acquiring recognition, success and growth are contributing factors
which
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 encourage
people
 to be devoted. Working without limit negatively impacts an individual’s health along with
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personal and social life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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