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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country.Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
These days have
needs
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 to learning a
mew
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new
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language
 to keep up communication between countries. Tourism, studies and work opportunities have attracted
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a huge
people
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number of people
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 travelling between
country
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countries
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.
As a result
, being capable
to
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 speaking and
socialize
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 must be knowing other
language
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languages
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lake
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like
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 your mother tongue. The purpose
to
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 being multilingual is useful it will be being you
communicate
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 with
other
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others
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 to be more easily and
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smoothly
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smoothy
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.
In addition
, it will encourage many
foreign
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 to travel and
discovered
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 new places. In
this
essay
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 I will discuss the advantages of studying
language
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the language
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.
First
 of all, if want to studies in many universities or increase opportunity to get a job.
Therefore
, the learn
other
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another language
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language
 it will be to
development
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the development
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 of skills and improve your minded and it will be helpful to be welcoming in
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mega
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a mega
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 company
such
 as
,
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 Facebook, Google, etc., there are hiring the best people no matter where they come from but they have a good education and best or high skills worker.
Additionally
, tourism is growing rapidly and travelling around the world be a trend in
this
 day, you should be able to speak and express what are you think.
That is
 the
reasons
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reason
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 why
must
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one must
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 study a new
language
.
On the other hand
, that many other reasons to be learning and to be a multilingual person.
As a result
, many
chances
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changes
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 will open when we are can talk with
other
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others
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 it will be
easily
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 to get
scholarship
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a scholarship
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 to preparing
master
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a master
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 or
doctor
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 degree. In
additionally
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, it can
rise
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 your entertainment in life because can know the new things from other
culture
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cultures
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such
 as music or story and it will affect in your mind. In conclusion, people being multilingual are not only for travelling or studying, but
also
 it is important to connect will all world.
Language
 is the key to
understanding
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the understanding
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of
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humanity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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