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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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These days,the ways of communication between
people
 have changed and
seems
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 to
stemmed
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stem
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 from
technology
.The advancement of
technology
 has affected our lives
in
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 both positive and negative sides. Due to
progression
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the progression
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 in
technology
,relationship types between
people
 has changed. One of the major ways is that nowadays,
people
 have more acquaintances and fewer close friends.
Technology
 has led to less face_to_face interaction between
people
.
Consequently
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people
 prefer communicating on social media and websites rather than meeting face_to_face.So
technology
 has
became
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 a permanent part
in
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 our daily lives and it can be harmful.
Technology
 has negatively impacted relationships.Topping the demerit list of
this
 change is diminishing rapport between
people
.Studies have shown that the more time you spend with
technology
,the more loneliness you will feel.
Moreover
,it will reduce our social skills.Despite the negative effects,we cannot deny the positive sides of
technology
.A shining example which all of us have been through
,
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was the significant role of
technology
 in communicating during the pandemic of
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the Corona
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Corona virus
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Coronavirus
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.When the whole
wolrd
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world
 was in quarantine,by using
internet
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the internet
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 and webcams all the
people
 could
kept
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 in touch. To conclude,there is not a definite answer to
this
 question that changes in relationships caused by
technology
 is
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whether
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wether
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whether
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 positive or is not.It is recommended to use an average amount of using
technology
,in
this
case
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 we can keep both our social skills and keeping up with
technology
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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