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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

#dangers #people #habit #society
It is frequently considered that the consumption of adjective substances like alcohol and
cigarate
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cigarette
cigarettes
 affect our internal body in
a
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various ways.
Although
populace
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are
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 aware of detrimental causes, they do not
rasist
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racist
resist
 themselves to purchase those items. In
this
 following essay, I will dissect contrary views and bring forth my deduction. In
this
 rapid-paced world ,
people
 are tensed and full of
stresses
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stress
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;
hence
 they want relaxation in their
life
 .
Consequently
, the products like tobacco and
cigarate
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cigarette
 amused them and allay their problems.
In addition
,
middle class
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people
 have a plethora of obligations towards their households and companies; in
order
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 to
that
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 they feel annoyed which leads to detrimental thoughts in their mind;
hence
 they lose mental control.
Therefore
, they look for an element which
amuse
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 them and smoking is one of the habits which assists them to find a modicum of happiness in their hectic
life
.
For instance
,
department
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the department
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 of health claims that for numerous
people
 ,
smocking
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smoking
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 prevents mental illness as after smoking they feel relaxed.
On the other hand
, it is a fact that
smocking
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smoking
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 kills thousands of
people
 by
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affecting
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effecting
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affecting
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people
's internal organs. To reduce smoking,
government
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the government
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 ought to organise a colloquium in which they meticulously scrutinise various factors to element
tabacco
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tobacco
Tabacco
. In fact , every school should educate their students so that children would save themselves from addiction in their early
stage
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stages
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 of
life
.
Moreover
, the government must imply few rules on
consumption
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 of addictive substances like they could restrict the
cigarate
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cigarette
 companies by ordering them
50
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a 50
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% cut in their production.
Furthermore
, an evangelist of
healthcare
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the healthcare
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 system endorse that if 40% populace stop smocking
than
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then
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 it would save another 10% population who becomes
victams
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victims
 of passive smocking. To sum up, smocking plays an immense role in our
life
 along with families'
life
.
Although
,
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apply
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smocking
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smoking
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 is detrimental for everyone,
people
 ought to consume it
in
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at
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 its threshold
otherwise
 the
life
 would be convoluted for everyone.
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