Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, others think that zoos are useful to protect rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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For many years, men have captured other species for entertainment purposes and featured them in
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and circuses.
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, recently,
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act has been considered
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a violation of animal rights.
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, still enslaving them is believed to be beneficial. In my opinion, most
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commit animal cruelty and
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, they should be banned. On the one hand,
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most
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are separated from their horde and are brought to these facilities. Since they are usually either caged or put in small glass rooms for exhibition means, they wouldn't have any room to roam.
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, they are usually
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malnutrition
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high quality
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food sources provided by the wilderness.
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, these
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would be diagnosed with severe physical illnesses as well as mental ones
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as depression.
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, most felines tend to get fat
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to their natural athletic figure.
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, we can deduct and observe their mistreatment in these places.
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, it is worth mentioning that specialists and veterinarians are given access to examine and treat
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in these areas.
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, as a previous considered endangered species, pandas, have been taken in good care of. In spite of being celibate bears, they are encouraged to have more sexual relations.
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, after they have given birth, the staff would help them in
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process.
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, each year, they have gone larger in number and fortunately, after years of hardship, they are no longer considered endangered.
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, some animal activists still believe that
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are ultimately advantageous. In conclusion, most
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cause cruelty towards
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and as a repercussion, most of them would get sick due to inappropriate treatments.
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, in some cases, they have enabled us to prevent extinctions in some species.
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, in my
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the benefits do not outweigh the demerits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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