Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, others think that zoos are useful to protect rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
For many years, men have captured other species for entertainment purposes and featured them in
zoos
and circuses. However
, recently, this
act has been considered as
a violation of animal rights. Change preposition
apply
Nevertheless
, still enslaving them is believed to be beneficial. In my opinion, most zoos
commit animal cruelty and therefore
, they should be banned.
On the one hand, obviously
most Add a comma
,obviously
animals
are separated from their horde and are brought to these facilities. Since they are usually either caged or put in small glass rooms for exhibition means, they wouldn't have any room to roam. Moreover
, they are usually malnutritioned
due to Correct your spelling
malnutrition
inaccessibility
Correct article usage
the inaccessibility
to
Change preposition
of
high quality
food sources provided by the wilderness. Add a hyphen
high-quality
Consequently
, these animals
would be diagnosed with severe physical illnesses as well as mental ones such
as depression. For example
, most felines tend to get fat in contrast
to their natural athletic figure. Thus
, we can deduct and observe their mistreatment in these places.
On the contrary
, it is worth mentioning that specialists and veterinarians are given access to examine and treat animals
in these areas. For instance
, as a previous considered endangered species, pandas, have been taken in good care of. In spite of being celibate bears, they are encouraged to have more sexual relations. Moreover
, after they have given birth, the staff would help them in parenting
process. Add an article
the parenting
Subsequently
, each year, they have gone larger in number and fortunately, after years of hardship, they are no longer considered endangered. Hence
, some animal activists still believe that zoos
are ultimately advantageous.
In conclusion, most zoos
cause cruelty towards animals
and as a repercussion, most of them would get sick due to inappropriate treatments. Nonetheless
, in some cases, they have enabled us to prevent extinctions in some species. However
, in my opinion
the benefits do not outweigh the demerits.Add a comma
,opinion
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