Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

These days,
humans
have a tendency to select self business rather than to be employed by a certain company or organization. There are many explanations for
this
trend and drawbacks why
people
are in
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of
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, and I will mention them in my essay below. Regarding the reasons for the widespread bandwagon,
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proficiency is universal why
people
choose to be self-employed. It is obvious that if
humans
have their own companies, they can make more money and
the
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opportunity to be millionaires.
Moreover
, they
also
can invest in their dream
jobs
and develop them by themselves.
In particular
, being a
staff
or working for a certain organization, some
people
can not select satisfaction
jobs
that they yearn for because of many aspects
such
as salary, stability, high requirement,…
However
, being employed by themselves gives
humans
a chance to decide to do and boost their
favorite
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and potential field.
Besides
, not only do
people
have prominent and dream
jobs
but they
also
are not afraid of many risks as
staff
often are dissatisfied with things like unpaid wages, nine-to-five
jobs
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power, toxic workplace,…
Nevertheless
,
self-employed
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work type
also
has its drawbacks compared to being a
staff
or worker.
Initiatively
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investment that
humans
must have before developing one field. Indeed, it means that they have to make the decision based on their own ability of finance.
Furthermore
, the responsibility of being a leader and CEO is super difficult, it requires they have to be flexible, well-prepared
,
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and have clear intentions and goals.
In addition
, it forces
people
to enrich new information and adapt to the harsh environment day-by-day when being the owner of a company. In fact, the ones who can be responsible for
this
type of work are very talented, knowledgeable, and intelligent; since they have to face many significant decisions, different problems, and tricky circumstances. In short, having plenty of reasons for those who choose to be self-employed without being a
staff
and it has been becoming a popular tendency despite its high requirements and risks.
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