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The line chart indicates the numbers of part-time employers in 4 countries in the
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 kingdom in 1980 and 2010. It is clear that Wales had the highest percentage of people who have part-time jobs in 1980 and 2010, and Scotland had the lowest numbers in1980
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, by 2010, both countries saw a noticeable increase. In 1980, 25% of people in England worked half-time compare to Wales that had the highest number about 35% and both of them had a slight rose in 2010
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 Scotland even though, in 1980 had the lowest figures, in 2010 climb up and reach to approximately 20%. Northern Ireland choose a different path and was the only country that had a negligible decline over the period and in 1998 had about 15% of people who worked part-time and decreased a couple of percentage in 2010.
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