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in the future, more people choose to go on holiday in thire own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree of disagree ?

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As of some majority of the people would like to
choose
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 spend their
holiday
 in their own
country
 rather than travel in abroad.
Although
 spending the
holiday
 in their won
country
 would be cheap and confidant, I will not agree with it. The purpose and objective of the vacation will differ from person to person. Some are like to stay relax and calm and others want more experience and adventures. In the future, people will use to spend the
holiday
 in own places it will reduce the flying cost, visa fee, guide charges and many more. If you are travelling to your own
country
 you can easily find the places to stay and no need for a guide to the place which you can find the details by communicating with the local people. Another major reason is to spend the
holiday
 in own
country
 will be confidence and safety. for anyone their
Country
 will be the safest and give feeling confidence. It is because they know the culture,rules and language. Whatever the thing it will be easy.
Such
 as if one has to face an accident they know what are action need to be taken. On the other ,hand travelling abroad will make more happiness and give a lot of experiences for the life.
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