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Some people think that planning for the future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In order to achieve your goals, planning plays a vital role in your
life
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 or career. If there is no
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 or strategy
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 the path
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 choose may lead to failure. Few
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 think it is
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-consuming to
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 the
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 and they rather enjoy
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 in the present.
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, I think it is important to
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 ahead to secure
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 without neglecting the present situation. I will put light on my argument in later paragraphs. To start with, the
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 is unpredictable to some extent,
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, it
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 depends on the individual's own action.
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, if the person is spending all his or her earnings on leisure today
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 there won't be any money left for upcoming hospital bills.
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, to secure the wealth,
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 and
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 of their loved ones,
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 need to
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 from today. It is very common that working
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 are facing issues with their work-
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 balance and the most common reason is, fear of losing a job. Most of them have families to feed. If they avoid
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 planning, it could lead them to live miserable
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 even after retirement. It is mandatory to invest
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 in planning the
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 to achieve career,
life
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 or retirement goals and fulfil the dreams.
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, it is not advisable to waste more
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 in planning the
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 compromising your present needs.
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, a person shouldn't cut out daily needs in order to save money for the
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 because
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 somehow it is going to affect their
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 at present and
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 as a consequence. As quoted by the famous person "
Health
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 is Wealth".
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 should invest
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 planning smartly without making their present
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 stressed. There are certain insurance and investment plans in the market that doesn't require too much money invested
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 as mutual funds where
people
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 could
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 their retirement, children's education, secure their
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 by investing a minimal amount on monthly basis
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 of lumpsum. To summarise, some of the
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 are avoiding planning
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 because they think, it is a waste of
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 and they may lose the
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's current essence.
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, it can be avoided if the planning is done right without hampering the present situation and as a
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people
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 benefited from securing their
life
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.
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