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some people think that public libraries are necessary,while others believe that public libraries are no longer important. what is your opinion

#people #libraries
some
people
 believe that using
books
 should be easy and all of the population able to use public
libraries
 and the other hand some
people
 think public
libraries
 are not useful at
this
 time. in my ,opinion public
libraries
 can help
people
 easy availability
books
 without any cost. In fact that globalization was a phenomenon in a decade and
books
 were increased the knowledge of the spread of technology and innovations. for ,example students in school and university have access to updated articles and
books
 in public
libraries
 and improve findings in researchers.
this
 subject can lead to important scientific achievements and great inventions in the future and help to the growth of industrial and manufacture to produce better products. some researchers show that reading
books
 stimulated children cognitive development and can help to encourage them to think outside the box.
this
 helps them to be less prone to mental health. sometimes mental health lead to an increased crime rate and desire ,to be addicted to drugs and social isolation in adults .using public
libraries
 can get to one of the healthiest pastimes in adults and learn to them how to share information together and team working.in
this
 day after covid-19 pandemic children have to stay at home and use social media to the relationship by friends. after covid-19 pandemic public
libraries
 is a good choice for children to meeting their friends and talk about the
books
 read in
this
 days. as a
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result government adopt a novel approach to establish public
libraries
 in cities and rural areas . the main benefit of
this
Correct determiner usage
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libraries
 can raise public awareness of knowledge of
people
 and lead to the growth of culture in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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