In many countries, the traditional customs are being lost. What you think why this happens? What schools and parents need to do to keep the traditional customs alive?

#countries #customs #schools #parents

Folk customs are getting being neglected and starting

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by nations.

Parents

and

education

centres can give knowledge about their tradition via stories so that their

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children

children's

childrens

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and family members and students take

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interest

in it. I will illustrate those possible reasons about it and what elder members of the family and

education

centres can do to

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children

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take

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interest

in it and start accepting it. By saying strongly, nowadays everyone

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busy schedule with

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work, in studies, and

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type of social

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media

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medias

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facebook

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twitter

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etc.

Gaurdians

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are

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to tell

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children

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and there young generation about history and

culture

of their religion.

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children

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this

generation do not know about

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god and

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goddess

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names.

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parents

and

education

centers

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are so busy nowadays that they are not celebrating festivals at their house, schools, universities or

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institutes

so that

children

get to know about

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own nations

culture

For instance

, recently BBC media crew take a

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random

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survey to ask questions to the people and

children

about there

culture

and tradition and they get 20% elder people and 85%

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are failed to give answers

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there

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questions. In the past approximately 20 years ago,

parents

and teachers are celebrating

there

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festivals in a very good manner. They

plays

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many

competions

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competitions

between students like

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, drama and they

also

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to students to give a performance on

there

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culture

Parents

and school professors start telling them stories and provide different books to

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small ones about

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culture

. In conclusion, it is very difficult to change peoples

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about

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knowledge towards

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culture

and tradition but

education

centres and older people of families should start giving time to

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small ones about their

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different ways so that

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they

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interest

in it and

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follow there traditions in the coming future.

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In many countries, the traditional customs are being lost. What you think why this happens? What schools and parents need to do to keep the traditional customs alive?

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Some people think it is the government’s responsibility to tackle environmental issues. Others believe it is up to each individual to be environmentally responsible. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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IELTS Writing task 2: In the future, it seems it will be more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays both men and women spend a lot of money on beauty care. This was not so in the past. What may be the root cause of this behavior? Discuss the reasons and possible results.

Some argue younger people are not suitable for important positions in the government, while others think this is a good idea. Discuss both views and give your opinion.