There are many extinct animals’ species in the world. Some people think we should protect animals from dying out, while others believe we should spend more time on problems of human beings. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

A lot of specific kinds of animals have
been
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vanished
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banished
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from the universe. It is considered by some
people
that these species must be saved from
this
terrible situation, while others consider that primary focus should be upon problems of
human
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race and
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agree with
this
point of view. On the one hand, some
people
think that nature has given a specific role to every living organism and that role might even be unknown to mankind, still, to maintain the balance of
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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, it is mandatory to respect
this
natural distribution. Animals, being only capable of basic instincts, depends upon human beings for struggles regarding survival,
hence
, in order to aid them, they must be provided essential help.
On the other hand
, it is commonly thought that human beings are facing a lot of serious issues these days and emphasis should be on finding the
much needed
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solutions and I agree. In the modern world, despite
of
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advances in the field of agriculture and technology,
people
are still lacking the basic necessities of life,
for example
, free education, enough food and stable jobs etc. A lot of
people
still go hungry by the end of the day.There is not enough food
avaliable
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available
to meet
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demands of the general population. A quarter of the world's population is still living below
poverty
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the poverty
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line. These serious problems
demands
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quick and practical solutions. In conclusion, while
people
have their view, in my opinion, the current state of affairs regarding various issues of mankind needs to be pondered upon in order to find a timely and secure way of managing
this
disastrous situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extinction, Endangered species, Conservation, Habitat, Ecosystem, Biodiversity, Ethical responsibility, Preservation, Ecosystem services, Wildlife protection, Poverty alleviation, Healthcare, Climate action, Resource allocation, Food security, Interconnectedness, Sustainable development
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