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There are many extinct animals’ species in the world. Some people think we should protect animals from dying out, while others believe we should spend more time on problems of human beings. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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A lot of specific kinds of animals have vanished from the universe. It is considered by some
people
 that these species must be saved from
this
 terrible situation, while others consider that
primary
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 focus should be upon problems of the human race and I agree with
this
 point of view. On the one hand, some
people
 think that nature has given a specific role to every living organism and that role might even be unknown to mankind, but to maintain the balance of the ecosystem, it is mandatory to respect
this
 natural distribution. Animals, being only capable of basic instincts, depends upon human beings for struggles regarding survival,
hence
, in order to aid them, they must be provided essential help.
On the other hand
, it is commonly thought that human beings are facing a lot of serious issues these days and emphasis should be on finding the
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 solutions and I agree. In the modern world, despite
of
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advances in the field of agriculture and technology,
people
 are still lacking the basic necessities of life,
for example
, free education, enough food and stable jobs etc. A lot of
people
 still go hungry by the end of the day.There is not enough food available to meet the rising demands of the general population. A quarter of the world's population is still living below
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 line.
Therefore
, these serious problems demanding quick and practical solutions must be considered on
urgent
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 basis. In conclusion,
Although
people
 have their view, in my opinion, the current state of affairs regarding various issues of mankind needs to be pondered upon, in order to find a timely and secure way of managing
this
 disastrous situation
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extinction, Endangered species, Conservation, Habitat, Ecosystem, Biodiversity, Ethical responsibility, Preservation, Ecosystem services, Wildlife protection, Poverty alleviation, Healthcare, Climate action, Resource allocation, Food security, Interconnectedness, Sustainable development
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