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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in life. What is the reason? What are the effects on society and family life?

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There is a controversial notion heating a debate over people’s decision to have children later in our lifetime. From my belief, I consider myself as a proponent
to
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 perspective since
this
 trend has
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 more good than harm towards our society. It is understandable to note that youngsters tend to give birth to their
first
 child in later life for an eclectic mix of reasonable underlying roots. The Younger generation
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 not prepare well about mental health and financial background since they’re still too young and don’t have much of
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experimental life. They
also
 do not want to be constrained about anything, still want to hang out, live a free life. For those
reasons
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this
 statement has affected young adolescents' lives. When it comes to
this
 problem, it has an impact on many sides.
First
 of all, they have suffered from burden about financial since they have to
raising
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child
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, face
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a flood amount of expenditure
such
 as food, education or healthcare. The government
also
 has to bear a responsibility to invest a part of a source of public coffers and the budget might not handle all
this
 notion while there are many dire issues that need
helping
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.
On the other hand
, some people even being
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, they
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