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When designing a building, some people think that the intended use of the building should be taken into account rather than the outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is widely believed that in building designs the main focus usually concentrates on its functionality rather than its exterior.
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 point of view. On the one hand,
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 modern look of a building could be a major contributor in drawing clients and companies.
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 and a perfect style sometimes are a great part of
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 for businesses to be located in and for customers to frequent.
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most of us when choosing a hotel to book get the
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 impression by a facade.
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, big companies prefer luxury and appealing offices to show their status and prosperity.
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, a specific location might oblige a construction to be part of
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 idea and not to contradict
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 style of
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 area. Here in
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 you may easily find
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, it is hard to disagree with the fact, that every building is built to perform practical tasks, е.g. selling things, running events, delivering medical services and so on. Without
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, functionality
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 a major role in design.
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, a hospital must ensure easy access
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 emergency vehicles and even helicopters, provide comfortable and safe staying
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 visitors and patients. Whereas, office
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 should offer a wide range of facilities for meetings, catering, hardware infrastructure. To conclude, in my
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 the external appearance cannot be a decisive factor of
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 of a building, as far as it doesn't fulfil the basic criteria - usability and,
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, return of investments.
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, a total disregard for
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 layout may
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Functionality
  • Aesthetics
  • Superficial
  • Facade
  • Adaptability
  • Sustainability
  • Cultural significance
  • Historical significance
  • Economic considerations
  • User experience
  • Commercial success
  • Harmonious balance
  • Innovative design
  • Practicality
  • Ergonomics
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Architectural integrity
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