Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison, but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community. Do you agree or disagree?

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I writing in connection with the current situation of heating at our flat. Despite the efforts to repair the heating equipment, the problem is becoming severe these days. He might have caused deteriorated the situation. The main problem is in the insulation of the supply pipe. Because proper insulation is required to be placed for the uninterrupted supply of the heating fluid to the building,

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unit is not providing sufficient heating for four people. It is causing sleepless nights and mental trauma. We are students and due to

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condition our studies are affecting,

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we get fewer hours to rest and we need to take best out of it I would appreciate

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the job, rather than using the same person for all the jobs related to our building.

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can be beneficial for all of us. And if

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situation does not

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, we might have to leave

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house. I look forward to your affirmative action to our problem. Yours sincerely Ravi Prakash

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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