Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison, but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community. Do you agree or disagree?

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I writing in connection with the current situation of heating at our flat. Despite the efforts to repair the heating equipment, the problem is becoming severe these days. He might have caused deteriorated the situation. The main problem is in the insulation of the supply pipe. Because proper insulation is required to be placed for the uninterrupted supply of the heating fluid to the building,

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unit is not providing sufficient heating for four people. It is causing sleepless nights and mental trauma. We are students and due to

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we get fewer hours to rest and we need to take best out of it I would appreciate

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the job, rather than using the same person for all the jobs related to our building.

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Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison, but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

should human adapt to technology or should technology be adapted to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent? Discuss both views and give your point.

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In most countries, prison is an effective solution to the problem of crime. Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide education for those who violate the law. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe that it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.