Whether or not someone achieve their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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claim that

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is the most crucial element contributing to a person's success.

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I accept that

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does have an important role in helping

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reach their targets, I would argue that hard work and determination are much more crucial factors leading to the achievement of an individual. On the one hand, I agree that

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can be an important factor.

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some

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are fortunate enough to be born

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a wealthy family, which allows them to have

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education or to easily start their own business without having to borrow money from someone else.

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, these

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tend to have better opportunities to succeed than those coming from poor families.

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, some individuals are lucky to be given great talents which others do not have.

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, Mozart was able to play music when he was very young,

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Lionel Messi already had great football skills when he was born.

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, I would argue that

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can be necessary, it is not the most crucial

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factor leading to success.

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,

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need to work really hard and put much effort into their jobs if they want to be successful.

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, before becoming one of the best football players in the world, Cristiano Ronaldo had to go through intense training hours every day for many years.

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, a person is less likely to reach his targets if he does not have determination. On the way

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to success, there might be many difficulties, and

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need to keep moving forward to overcome those challenges. In conclusion,

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I agree that

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is important to some extent in helping

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become successful, I believe that hard work and determination are the most important elements