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People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
people
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 who know themselves, choose their
job
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 early and stick to it are more likely to have better quality working
life
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 than those who often have to
change
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 their
job
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. I completely agree with
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 because of two reasons.
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 with,
people
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 who can decide early on their career path, mostly have their passion since young and
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 these
people
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 do not have to deal with finding themselves. It is not easy at all when it comes to finding what they love and what they want to do in the future.
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, some
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 might have to spend half of their
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, searching for what they want to be, and worse, they might not be able to find it.
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,
people
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 who know themselves better, tend to have a much easier work
life
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 because they do not have to spend that much time to find their ambition.
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, individuals who have to
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 their occupation frequently, often struggle with changing many things;
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 as changing workplaces, changing types of jobs. Some
people
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 here in Thailand,
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, switch their
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 from being office workers to chefs. Changing the work is not easy by any means, sometimes changing the work means
people
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 have to
change
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 the living place as well.
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, to move to the
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 chapter of
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, not only cost
people
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 their energy, but it will mostly cost some money to unnecessary things as well. In conclusion, I strongly agree that
people
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 who decide on their career early and stick to it, have a more satisfying working
life
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 than those who struggle to
change
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 the
job
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 regularly because they tend to know themselves better so they do not have to waste the time finding what they love.
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, changing jobs is a difficult task to do for the above reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • job satisfaction
  • professional goals
  • climb the career ladder
  • develop expertise
  • long-term commitment
  • financial security
  • varied experiences
  • prevent monotony
  • job security
  • career progression
  • personal preferences
  • industry dynamics
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