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TASK: With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes.

#world #money #space #exploration #waste
Through the years, the ideas on which governments
have
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 spend nation’s
money
 will always have supporters and opponents. Trying to reach other planets and explore
the
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space demand a lot of
money
, which in some parts of the same countries involved, is a lack. On the one hand, is part of
the
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human
develop
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 to explore new lands by looking for expansion. It is inside our DNA to explore new places and to get as much information as we can about something that has never been reached before. The
fundations
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foundations
 of science are researching new
enviroments
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environments
environment
, testing theories and prooving
hypotesis
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hypothesis
. Curiosity is innate to human beings and
this
 is the reason why we all can enjoy the technology we have nowadays. If Colombus would not have had the curiosity for
traveling
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 abroad Spain, who knows how many years would have happened before Europe and Asia meet America.
On the other hand
, all countries, no matter how
money
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 or life quality they
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posses
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, have intern population problems. Countries like China or
USA
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the USA
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 still have issues
to deal
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about
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 hunger and
poberty
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poverty
puberty
 in some areas of the country. There are still zones where getting
education
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 is a luxury
,
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 when it should be a right for everybody.
Money
 spent on space programs could be used by creating educational programs,
communitary
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community
 food places and giving people
a
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decent medical attention. In conclusion, even though space
programms
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programs
programmes
 spend a lot of
money
 on trying to explore new places, which could be used to solve population problems existing for decades; it is part of the
growing
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 of our
specie
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 to intend
increasing
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 our knowledge about how other planets, galaxies and systems exist. It is not necessary to take the
money
 from one to
fullfil
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fulfil
full fill
 the other. With a
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well executed
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 plan, governments can satisfy both.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • resource acquisition
  • inspire
  • funding allocations
  • global challenges
  • poverty alleviation
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • educational reform
  • long-term investments
  • economic growth
  • sustainable development
  • societal benefits
  • budgetary priorities
  • space industry
  • fiscal responsibility
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