Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country. Others think that they should live as a separate minority group with different lifestyles. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Over the
last
two or three decades, countless people have been moving to overseas nations due to better
lifestyle
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. some say that folks should be accepted new fashion when they move to another country, while
other
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say that they should be lived as a particular minority group with various lifestyles, they do not change anything. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and will give my opinion
finally
.
To begin
with, every country has
an
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unique
culture
,
migirants
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migrants
should be followed to their's
tradition
when they are moving to
ohter
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other
parts of the world. If a person cannot accept their
tradition
, he will
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more depression and stress,
as a result
,
this
can leads to getting isolation from that society. Taking Indians
for example
, more and more folks move to
an
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europe
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state
in
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every year, that nation follows a western
culture
while Indians cannot accept to their's fashion,
thus
, many get depression in order to sometimes has killed themselves.
Therefore
, when a person moves
to
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abroad while she should be adopted a new
culture
.
On the other hand
, certainly, adopting a new
culture
is a difficult task who the
migirants
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migrants
, they should be lived as a minority community public.
In other words
, every person has their own
tradition
and they follow many years so the
migirants
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migrants
should live what they are,
thus
, their's own
tradition
might be spread to all over the world. Taking Canada,
for instance
,
this
government has given a public holiday of Tamil former festival which is Pongal due to countless
tamil
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people are living and they are celebrated every year,
hence
this
is possible. Obviously, no one cannot change to their's root of
culture
even they live in
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parts. To conclude, moving
to
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the abroad is most popular
among
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the world.
Migirants
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Migrants
will be avoided stress and depression while they should adhere
a
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new
culture
, while they cannot change and they should live as a small community.
However
, In my opinion, about
this
,
migirants
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migrants
should not adopt a new
culture
and they adhere to their own
tradition
. I hope
this
process is conducive to spreading their own
tradition
to
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all over the globe.
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  • integration: The process of combining into an integral whole; cultural or social integration into a new society.
  • harmonious: Marked by agreement in feeling, attitude, or action.
  • cultural exchange: The sharing and learning of different cultural practices and ideas among groups.
  • identity: The fact of being who or what a person or thing is; cultural identity relates to a sense of belonging to a culture.
  • multicultural: Relating to or including many different cultures.
  • assimilation: The process of taking in and fully integrating into another culture.
  • diversity: The inclusion of different types of people with different traits or cultures in a group or organization.
  • cultural understanding: Awareness and acceptance of different cultures.
  • minority group: A group of people who differ from the larger group in a society based on cultural, ethnic, religious, or linguistic traits.
  • cultural preservation: The act of maintaining and protecting cultural beliefs, practices, and languages.
  • social cohesion: The bonds or ‘glue’ that bring people in a society together.
  • cultural adaptation: Adjusting and adapting to a new culture without completely abandoning one's own cultural practices.
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