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Many people believe that social media networking sites (e.g. Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 tend to use social media like Facebook as it is now one of the most influential websites for both adults and young
people
.For oneself,
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 agree that are undoubted benefits, but
also
 various negative effects stem from
this
 too. Perhaps the major benefit is one can learn from
such
 websites and make contact with other
people
 from all over the world.
Moreover
, Facebook can be a community where business and marketing take place.
On the contrary
, one of the main huge negative effects is the sedentary lifestyle which the networking sites encourage meaning that
people
 may incline to obesity or inadequate development. Added to
this
 is the most alarming impact of
such
 activities is the possibly the risk of addiction which explains that individuals become obsessed with social media and are unable to socialise with family or peers.
This
 undermines their interpersonal skills and makes them underperform socially in person which is not
also
 a good factor for society. To sum up, the risks posed by excessive using social media are connected to an unhealthy lifestyle and the possibility of dependency on the activity.
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