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It is believed by some people that people should go through a psychological health test before getting married. How far do you agree?

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Psychological health
test
 is known to be (
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, used, applied) as a way to analyze citizens’ healthy perceptions and
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./ P H T is known to be used as a way to determine if a person thinks and acts in an acceptable way. Contemporaneously/
Simoltaneously
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, it is
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 conviction among nations that individuals ought to pass mental health
test
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 before espousing. Personally, I strongly believe
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defend the idea (I am adamant that) that the bride and groom should take a
test
 to avoid disappointment in the future of their marriage.
This
 essay is going to demonstrate my views with supportive explanations and provide examples where needed
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relevant.
First
 of all, the main reason why I agree with the given statement is that the number of divorces tends to increase every year. What I mean is that people tend to make
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 decisions before they get married without knowing each other well enough. To clarify, it is a common scenario that people change due to jealously and everyday problems. For
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, a friend of mine got married
last
 year and she
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 with her husband and he almost killed her.
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hence
, mental health
test
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 might be considered as the most significant step of getting married since
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 can reduce the number of divorces and disappointments.
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