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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? Are there more advantages than disadvantages?

#people #phones #texts
In the recent past,
people
 are more
use
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 their
phone
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phones
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 for chatting with their
friends
 or families than talking face-to-face because when they
use
 their
smartphone
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smartphones
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, they can send to their
friends
 or families from anywhere. From my point of view,
although
 It convenient and do not have to wait for chatting, it did not feel interesting and sometimes
people
 may
did
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do
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 not understand each other. These days, technology
play
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plays
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significant
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a significant
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 role
for
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in
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people
’s
life
 including how they talking with their
friends
 or families that can make their
life
 more easily.
For example
,
businesspeople
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business people
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 who did not have enough time to
talking
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talk
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 with their
friends
 or cannot come back home on the weekends,
they
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choose the way that can make their
life
 easier.
In other words
, they
use
 their
phone
 for texting or calling with their buddy,
for
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in
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this
 way they do not have to go to the place and it did not waste their time to
work
.
On the other hand
,
sender
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the sender
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 and receiver feel using
smartphone
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a smartphone
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not
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is not
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 an interesting object rather than talking in real
life
 which they can see each other. The reason is some account it cannot talking on
phone
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the phone
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 because it can make
people
 misunderstanding, lead to
mistake
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a mistake
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 in their
work
.
Furthermore
, in
term
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terms
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 of normal talking, most
of
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apply
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smartphone
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the smartphone
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user
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users
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 prefer to meet their
friends
 in real
life
 more than on the
phone
 talking since they can do activities
besides
 just talking.
Consequently
,
people
 can feel more comfortable and happier to meet their mate
whose
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who
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 did not see for a long time,
also
 reduce stress from
work
 and relax from busy days. In conclusion, even though
smartphone
 can make
life
 easier that can
talking
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talk
be talking
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 from anywhere they are
,
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apply
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people
 who
use
smartphone
 suggest to see each other in real situation and can make they relax from
work
.
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