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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and, as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

Major businesses have an immense budget for marketing and promotion of their
products
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 which they consider necessary for introducing the product in the market.
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,
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 raises problems, both amongst customers and local businesses. In
this
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 essay, we shall look at both sides while
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 looking into various ways of promoting local
products
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.
First
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 and foremost, not every customer requires all the
products
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 that are being introduced into the market.
Furthermore
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, the bombardment of adverts of these
products
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 instils and inquisitiveness in the minds of the citizens, thereby creating a certain sense of desire from the potential customer.
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, different fast-food chains promoting their
products
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.
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 they provide a faster, quicker solution to curing one's hunger, they fail to mention the health problems they can cause, especially for someone who already has pre-existing health issues.
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, marketing from larger companies must be limited to a particular number of times an advertisement can be aired.
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, the free time slots available must be used to air promotions for local
products
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. Exhibitions can be held, showcasing these local
products
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 to the community. An example of
this
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 can be seen in Trivandrum, where every year exhibitions are promoting local foods,
products
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 from different parts of India along with local
products
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 in the national stadiums. In conclusion, I feel that
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 every company has a right to air their product, it needs to be done in a more controlled manner, which reduces the emphasis on unwanted
products
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 and
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 focuses on the local ones.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-reliance
  • disrupts
  • entrepreneurship
  • economic diversity
  • monopolistic
  • financial power
  • homogenization
  • awareness campaigns
  • tax incentives
  • sustainability
  • artisan
  • eco-friendly
  • dominate
  • innovation
  • stifle
  • richness
  • cultures
  • traditions
  • highlighting
  • distinguish
  • superior
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