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Social Media websites have amassed large user bases. Do the advantages of being a part of a social media site outweigh the disadvantages?

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a massive
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 amount of
people
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 are part of social
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platforms
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 communities. Being on these
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 has both benefits and drawbacks. In my opinion,
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despite
 the fact that there are risks of cyber dangers, social
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 sites are very useful and beneficial when use wisely.
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, social
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 is a great source of
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recents
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recent
 news. When an unexpected situation occurs, the fastest sources to access
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 details of the event are social
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platforms
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 as many
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 with insights can easily provide
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updates on the situation in no time while other forms of mass communication require more time and resources.
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, social
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 is particularly useful
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 remote communication. throughout the year
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2020,
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 across the globe were affected by the COVID-19 pandemic. Students could not attend school and the classes were conducted through online solutions. It is
undenieable
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undeniable
 that
platforms
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 that provide
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virtual
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 became highly significant for learning processes and communication during the pandemic.
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 the aforementioned reasons, being a part of certain social
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platforms
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 can be beneficial or in some cases, required considered the importance of these
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platforms
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 in
people
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's life.
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, there are a few drawbacks
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 using social
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 carelessly. There are potential risks of unwanted
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 exposure which could cause serious trouble for the user. Personal
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 that users posted can be used by criminals in order to track the user down and do harm to them.
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, exposing too
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 personal details can be dangerous as those with bad
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intentions
 could use the
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 to cause serious harm to the person and
people
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aroud
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around
 them. To summarize, social
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 is potentially useful and has become a significant part
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 most
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's life.
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, in order to use social
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platforms
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 safely, users have to be careful and do not expose too much personal
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