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In some countries, imported food is increasingly popular. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In view of that increased tendency in popularity of imported
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 in some countries, the impacts raised by
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 are subject to much debate. As far as the local job opportunities and
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 safety are concerned, I believe that the problem of
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 trend far outweighs its positive impact.
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 safety of imported
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 is hard to guarantee. A large number of chemical materials could be added to various
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, preventing them from rotting in long-distance transportation. If we do not clean these imported fruits, vegetables and so forth thoroughly, the residue of harmful chemicals will have an adverse impact on customers’ health.
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, it is common for some foreign exporters to use preservatives to ensure the freshness of meat, while preservatives are usually deemed as noxious chemicals. Simultaneously,
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 trend would take jobs away from local farmers. The large proportion of imported
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 means that we do not need so many local
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 anymore, and it would pose a threat to the local agricultural economy. In the long term, considering the decreased need for local
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, it can be forecasted that the opportunities for local farm jobs would decline. Admittedly, I am not saying that imported
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 are good for nothing. Various foreign
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 can provide consumers with more choices, creating a market with diverse
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. Meanwhile, the competition between local
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 producers and foreign
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 producers could lead to lower
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 prices and better
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 quality.
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 producers have to focus on higher quality to avoid being sifted out in the competition. In conclusion, considering the
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 safety and local agricultural economy, I maintain the view that the popularity of imported
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 would have an opposite impact, while the variety and quality would improve at the same time.
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