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Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for a student’s home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Studying in a foreign
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 has become popular for many years. One group of people think that getting an education in another
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can be beneficial for a student’s home
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. I totally agree with
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, it is beneficial in terms of new technology development and establishment of new industry or business. They get a chance to learn the latest technology.
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, they acquire knowledge through hands-on experiments. When they return to their own place, they can implement their expertise in different fields. Many scholars enrol in MBA in reputed overseas university and after finishing their education they start a new business which is useful for
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’s economic growth.
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, Flipkart CEO studied at Harvard University. He came back to India and founded flip kart. It has a great success for Indians as well as its economy. The
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 example, Ratan Tata who
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 Harvard but he came back and implemented his ideas and knowledge in the establishment of Tata Company.
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, it is beneficial on the ground of social and life skills knowledge perspectives.
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 study with different cultural people. So, they
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 get the opportunity to know diverse cultures and traditions.
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 as, Japan is famous for its cleanness.
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, here
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 do all their work themselves like, cleaning, arranging books, cooking.
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, the Japanese are very polite and well behaved.
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 can implement these habits in their own
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, in India ,
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students
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 do not learn
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 types of life skills training in school. Returned
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 and government can work together to make our India cleaner and more advanced. In conclusion, there are myriad benefits for studying overseas and
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’ home
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. It can be benefited by latest technology implementation, practical ideas, behavioural development among people.
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