Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession. What factors may have caused this situation and what in your opinion should be done about it?

These days, a high rate of unemployment among the youths who have just graduated from
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universities is a major concern in many countries. In the following paragraphs, the cause of an increase in a jobless rate among
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fresh
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graduates
, and some sensible remedies will be explored in detail.
First
of all, most
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university
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graduates
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job
experience
to reach the
job
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companies
prefer to recruit
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persons who have at least 3 years
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doing the relevant jobs.
Therefore
, it is impossible to have
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job
experience
after graduation.
Furthermore
, the young generation
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to work in
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famous
companies
such
as SCG, Google, Facebook, and so on that pay high salaries, which those
companies
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position in a highly competitive.
As a result
, only a few people get recruited and a vast majority of applicants are still unemployed.
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attempt to alleviate the aforementioned consequences and promote
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recruitment, the authority should organize
job
fairs and develop the searching
job
website in order to
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the requirement of the
companies
and the
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fresh
graduates
.
For example
, a million
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graduates
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job
by the search engine called Jobbkk.com, which allow everyone to post their
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their website to enable the
companies
to find the right persons who suitably work with them.
Moreover
, the educational authority should emphasize
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enhancing
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as it is
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good chance for students to try working in the desire jobs, which can be their primary jobs in the future. In conclusion, according to the information mentioned above, it can
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that the drastic increase in
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fresh
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being jobless is attributed to lack of
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job
experience
,
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and
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of the recent youth.
However
, it can be ameliorated by the action of the authority including developing the career search engine and improve the internship aspect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate job placement
  • current job market trends
  • practical experience
  • job openings
  • employment prospects
  • geographical barriers
  • automation and technological advances
  • economic conditions
  • mismatch between education and job market demands
  • over-saturation
  • theoretical knowledge
  • competitive job market
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