“Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?” Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Activities that are beyond

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regular academics should be encouraged in children from an early stage and should form an essential part of their lives. I am a firm believer of

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since each and every individual should be able to enjoy something they like apart from their daily routine. We shall be discussing

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with relevant examples.

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with, sports can be considered as a form of extra-

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where one can play it for fitness as well as to pursue it as a career option. encouraging children to take up a sport from

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stage will help them stay physically fit and healthy,

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swimming, football, etc have been proved to help lose weight.

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from a career prospect, sports have tremendously helped people succeed and earn more than average corporate jobs.

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, performing arts is

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an exemplary form of extra-

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activity that can be looked upon. it has become very common and most followed passion nowadays amongst youngsters as they have been an audience to various artists that have

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fame and wealth due to music or dance. with so many popular shows coming

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example, Indian Idol or Dance India Dance, kids get encouraged to take up performing arts as a hobby and hone them. To sum up, I would again like to emphasize that extra-

cirricular

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curricular

activities are very important in a student's life as they help them explore their other potential beyond academics and gives them a platform to showcase their talents.

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“Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?” Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The plans show the layout of the university’s sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Describe a writer you would like to meet. You should say: who the writer is what you know about this writer already what you would like to find out about him/her and explain why you would like to meet this writer.

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?