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There is no doubt that reading plays an important role in our life. Doing a project about reading I found an opinion of
teenagers
' favourite book genres and collected some data. I am going to comment on several key features of the results. Looking at the details, the most popular genre is
adventure
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 with 55,4%. It means that
teenagers
 like
this
 kind of literature because they
keen
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 on travelling and prefer
spent
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 their leisure  without any active work.
On the
contrary
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 the least popular genre is
romance
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 with 17,6%. According to the data in the table, sports
stories
 are more popular than animal
stories
,there are 49.2%, but animals
stories
 is 27,2 which mean twice less. Another important thing to mention is that detective, spy and war
stories
 are almost as popular as adventure
stories
 ,the difference between them is 0,1%. Both genres are
on demand
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 around
teenagers
. One problem that can be connected with reading is that nowadays 
teenagers
 ignore reading because of their gadgets  and
this
 may result in a poor world-view.
However
, there is a possible solution to
this
 problem.
For instance
, teachers at school should pay attention to reading and explain that reading is the most essential part
in
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 our life which can help us to be more educated. To sum everything up, I can say that reading broadens people's mind, improves their memory and helps to be more educated.
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