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Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think it is essential to learn history. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #history #waste #time
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The given line graph describes the proportion of the younger generation by their age
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 in the
united
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 Kingdom over an 11 year period from 1990 to 2001. It is measured in percentage. Overall, it is evident that the percentage of the youngest generation has significantly dropped, whereas the data for 10-14 years old
kids
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 has gradually increased. Focusing on the 0-4 and 5-9 age
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, between the period of 1990 and 1992,
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, both the
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 experienced a marginal growth at 26% and 24% respectively, the former declined as the latter continued to surge still 1997. By the end of the period, both witness a similar trend,
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, the population of the youngest
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 reached less than 24, while the count for 5-9 years
kids
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 was 25%.
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, the remaining two
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 showed
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contract figures in
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 statistics as the 10-14 years old school
kids
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 steadily jumped from 23% to more than 26%,
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, the
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 group went through a dramatic fall from securing the
first
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 position at the start and ended at 25%.
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