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Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at school and at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #television #school #home
Since
television
 has been invented a long time ago,
television
 has played an important role in every generation even in the present,
such
 as updating news or watching various shows or cartoons. But if
kids
 spend too much time on
television
 might not be good for them.
To begin
 with, if we spend too much time on anything. It always causes us in some things. But I do believe that
children
 can learn precisely from televisions program.
For example
, some programs on
television
 might inspire the
kids
 to have an interest in some things,
such
 as if the
children
 watch national geography, and it might inspire the
children
 to have an interest in an animal and grow up to work in
this
 industry. Even encourage the youngling to have more creative thinking by watching cartoons.
Moreover
, many
television
 programs provide many contents that give
children
 an experience that they might not have a chance to do in the real world,
such
 as travel to North Korea, or digging down into the Amazon River. And these kinds of programs might make the
kids
 have unique thinking and it might drive the
kids
 to generate some important ideas in the future. In summary, I agree that parents should encourage their
kids
 to watch
television
.
However
, they should not let their
kids
 watch all day because it will make their youngsters have problems,
such
 as eye problems if they watch the
television
 too close or spend too long, or addict to the
television
.
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  • language skills
  • pronunciation
  • cultural awareness
  • physical activity
  • obesity
  • eye strain
  • harmful content
  • appropriateness
  • active learning methods
  • group activities
  • practical experiments
  • hands-on experiences
  • retention of knowledge
  • social skills
  • in-person communication
  • social and emotional skills
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