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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-lebelled coffe and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-lebelled coffe and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates the figure for money spent on
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 importation
of
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 five countries
from
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 New Zealand between 2010 and 2012.
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, New Zealand continuously increased the amount of
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 exported to Japan, China, Mexico, and Russia,
while
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 Saudi Arabia had the opposite trend.
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, the revenue from Japan accounted for much higher than the rest of
importers
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. In 2010, New Zealand earned $271
million
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 from exporting
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 to Japan,
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 the value of exports to China ranked
second
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revenue at $74.9
million
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. The following 2 years witnessed a slight increase to $325.3
million
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 and $94
million
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 in the values of exports to these countries, respectively. Turning to the rest of the countries, the cost of imported
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 Saudi Arabia was $29
million
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, compared to Mexico and Russia which had paid just $1.2
million
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 and $968 thousand by 2010. After 2 years, Saudi Arabia was the only importer to see a substantial decline to $82 thousand, compared to a gradual rise to $3.3
million
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 and $2.404
million
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 in Mexico and Russia, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kiwi, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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