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People think that countries should produce food their population eats and import less food as much as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #food #population #import
Produce
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Producing
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 own
food
 and
import
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importing
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 less
food
 will be always a topic of discussion because different
goverments
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governments
 have
different
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a different
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point
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points
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 of view and economic
perspetive
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perspective
 and it will
depend
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ondepend
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 how politicians are planing to
goverment
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government
. I can give my personal opinion about it topic saying that I
am agree
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agree
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 with produce
ouw
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our
out
food
 is better than
import
. When a
country
produce
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produces
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 it own
food
 at the same time is helping their own economic and provide their population with more
job
 opportunities and all collateral
job
 which would
be create
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be created
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 for it kind of economic practice.
A
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An
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 example of it is a
country
 in South America called Colombia
becuase
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because
 it
sociaty
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society
 produce their
mayoroty
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majority
 of their
food
 in their community can get a
job
 easy and the
country
 help
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itself
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it self
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itself
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 to reduce the
pooverty
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poverty
property
. in the other hand when a
country
import
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to import
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food
 is
very
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every
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probability
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probable
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 that it
country
 become dependent of other
country
 and it economic is considerate dependent of others and cost for
food
 can be increased without consultation and the receptor
country
 must accept it if there is no other option around. and it would be a big issue
becuase
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because
 it is one of the
cause
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causes
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 of money devaluation. In conclusion
in my opinion
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, in my opinion,
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 is clear that always produce
food
 internally is
better
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a better
the better
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 solution for
job
 opportunities and create
better
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a better
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 life for habitants and not become a dependent
country
, the quality of
live
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life
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 will be very different
than
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from
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 others
country
 who should
import
food
 for
differents
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different
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 reasons.
country
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the country
a country
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 should consider
it
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its
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 option of own production and compare with another society to
made
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make
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 better decisions.
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