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Learning to play team sports is an important part of a child's education. Do you agree or disagree?

#team #sports #part #child #education
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Schools
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 not only teach academic subjects but
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 make
children
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 participate in different physical activities and
sports
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 as part of the curriculum.
In addition
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 to individual
sports
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such
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 as running,
children
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 should be trained to play
team
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games
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such
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 as football and basketball too. Learning to participate in
group
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 activities will establish
team
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 culture in their mind as well as make them enjoy
sports
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. Having
team
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 spirit is vital. We, human beings, cannot avoid being in groups to
work
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 towards a certain goal together.
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, we need to know how to and what to do as part of the
group
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 so that the
group
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 can operate in harmony to achieve the aim. Even among our family members, it makes things easier if all the family members
work
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 hand in hand.
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, we are usually supposed to
work
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 in teams at
work
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. Those who do not know how to adjust themselves in the organization will not enjoy working at all.
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 a precious life skill can be trained simply by allowing
children
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 to participate in the
group
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games
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 at
schools
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. Encouraging
children
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 to
play
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playgroup
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group
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games
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 can, indirectly, help to reduce obesity in
children
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. Modern
children
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 tend to stick to their mobile phones most of the time; it makes them gain weight.
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 it can be difficult to persuade
children
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 to stay active on their own, it is easier to make them move together with their friends.
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,
children
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 who enjoy playing outdoor
team
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sports
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 will enjoy themselves and can stay active at the same time. So,
schools
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 should include
group
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games
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 for
children
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 as part of their physical activities training. To conclude, I am in total agreement with
schools
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 allowing
children
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 to participate in
group
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sports
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, for it will teach the
children
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 a great lesson for life and
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 attribute to the
children
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's physical health.
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