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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

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Economical growth is the main key for the improvement of countries whose
governments
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 supported them more.
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, it is believed by some
people
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 that progressing in different types of fields must support at the same level. I'm on the latter side and
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 is essay discussed both sides. On the one hand, economic growth should be the main important goal of
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.
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, when
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 have a lifestyle without any concern about the level of their income, it converts them into a wealthy country.
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, they can be passed their
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 priorities as buying food and clothes and attending to their secondary needs like health and spending time for exercise, in opposite to some poor countries in Africa.
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, circumstances that encourage
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 to improve themselves is equally important.
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, if
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 learn how they can make a good treatment with each other it will bring the high-quality culture and
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 help to their
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 to have more progress in the economy.
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,
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 can support indoor industrial by buying their products.
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, types like social life and education are those fields that are related to economic growth
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 to the view of those who think only numbers are important for government.
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, the Central Bank of Iran sometimes manipulates the inflation rate, while the reality is different and
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 have a poor life. In conclusion,
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 the
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 must be aware of their economical state as the main goal, it is important that they support
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 as well as other fields like social life and culture to form better economic conditions. I hope it will happen over the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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