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It is believed by some citizens that people should go through a psychological health test before getting married.

#citizens #people #health #test
Psychological health
test
 probably helps to know before getting married about your partner, by the
way
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 psychological health
test
 can analyze citizens healthy perceptions and behaviour. Simultaneously,
this
 decision will give ahead to find out about
individuality
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 of
person's
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a person's
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 personality and intentions. Personally, I really support that 2 sides should take a
test
 to get away
problems
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 in the future of their marriage. Just I wanted to show my point of view and provide my examples. At
first
, you can ask me why I agree? The main reason is that the number of
divorce
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divorces
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 tends to increase in recent years. My explanation is that many people tend to make without thinking of
consequence
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 before they get married without knowing each other. People will make a lot of mistakes and
although
, it will lead to outcome to family litter. I can bring
example
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, a cousin of mine got married
last
 month and she quarrelled with her husband and he almost killed her.
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, most, ok
lets
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 say every single
of
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apply
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human must pass the psychological health
test
.
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