Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Ohter argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It has been discussed by
group
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a group
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of
individual
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individuals
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that
person
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a person
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should welcome the situation
such
as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, While other just deny it by saying that individual should enhance their skill ,show encourage and get
win
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a win
the win
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over a situation.
This
essay will include both
perspective
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perspectives
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and followed by my opinion.
Firstly
, Some
People
tends
have
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fear have to try again and they just accept the environment in they are. Some
people
is
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get disheartened when they don’t gain what they expect by their
first
attempt
such
as
people
comes to
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the metropolitan
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city to become
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actor but after getting neglected in
one two
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audience
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audiences
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, they drop
this
idea and remain
this
dream as dream
further
start living as
ordinary
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an ordinary
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person by accepting that acting is not
cup
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a cup
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of his tea. On the hand, There are
group
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a group
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of individual who implies a never give up attitude in their life. Many
people
believe failure is key
of
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to
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success,
hence
they don’t have fear of being
failure
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a failure
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,
Moreover
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,Moreover
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They
are upskill
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are upskilled
are upskilling
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in themselves and try with more preparation to achieve
their
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theirs
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at any scenario.
Lets
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take
example
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the example
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of super-star Amitabh Bachan,He came to Mumbai to become
radio
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a radio
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jockey,
however
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,however
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he got
rejection
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a rejection
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from many places but he overcome
for
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apply
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all his fail-events eventually today he is
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highest-earning
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highest
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the highest
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earning actor. To sum up,all above-mentioned,Some
People
mould-in
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mould in
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what they
gets
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get
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where
other fight
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another fight
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for desire.In my point of view,it is a total
worthy
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to try in what you believe ,utilize your mistake as
armor
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armour
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and keep
try
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trying
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till you don’t make it.
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