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In many countries, plastic bags are one the main sources of damage to the environment, and so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#countries #plastic #bags #sources #damage #environment
Since
plastic
bags
has
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been emerged
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, humans have used
it
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 as one of the daily things. According to the research,
plastic
bags
 is the only thing that
need
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 to wait for 1000 years for
its
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 to decay. So, it is obvious that many countries see it as the main factor that
need
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 to be banned. The following paragraph will be discussing my perspective.
Therefore
, the conclusion has been reached
To begin
 with, I do believe that
plastic
bags
 need to be banned because the time for the
plastic
bag
 to decay is
very
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 long period and causes many problems for animals.
For example
, some sea species eat
plastic
bag
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bags
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instead
 of eating planktons or seaweeds, and some land animals get choked by the
plastic
bag
 or eat the
plastic
bag
then
 dead. There are much of evidence that points directly to plastics
bag
 due to the surgery of animals' stomachs.
Moreover
, the
plastic
bag
also
 affects humans in many ways,
such
 as human's respiratory system that have been damaged by a various chemical that contains in the
plastic
bag
 once it gets burned. Which led to a crucial disease.
For example
, if
human
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a human
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 has breathed these chemicals, it will affect directly to human's lungs, and these chemicals will cause
life
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the life
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 of the human. In summary,
from
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the former and latter paragraphs, which provide all of
reasons
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 and examples. I entirely agree that
plastic
bags
 should be banned by all nations in the world, and
a
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clothe
bags
 should be considered to use
instead
 of using a
plastic
bag
.
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