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In some areas of US, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult What is your opinion.

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agree: reduce bad socal happen, spend more tiime on study, dis: prison, right: jpin other acti bec day
time
 is study, control Some
parents
 is believed that younger people should ask
thier
parents
 when they want to go out. In my opnion, I partly agree with
this
 statement, but I
also
 think that they have the right to join other particular activities at
night
 without the parent's accompaintion.
To begin
 with, there are some reasons why
teenagers
 should ask their
parents
 when they want to involve in some activities like go out with friends or stay over at
thier
 friend's house.
Firstly
,
parents
 is person who have vast life's experiences know how danager outside,
then
 they always want the best things for
thier
 children. For
instead
, before taking some parties outside if the teen tell with their
parents
 where they sre going or what
time
 they will come back.
Parents
 will feel more safety and know where
thier
 kids stay at that moment.
Secondly
, nowadays the percents of threating or killing teenager is increasing, according to the search in US. Those who want to attrack the students think that the
night
time
 is the best
time
 to do because they dont have the protection from their
parents
 Neverthness, the
teenagers
 who is over 15 years is adults engough to recognize their actions.
Therefore
, they do not need to accompaint
thier
parents
 when they go out at
night
.
Firstly
, the
teenagers
 learn how to protect themselves at school or watch in social networks. In conclusion, some family's rule is children need to ask their
parents
 opinion which is agree or not when they want to join
night
 activities.
However
, some
teenagers
 think that they can go without the accompaintion from
parents
 because they know how to protect themselves when bad situition occurs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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