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Band 4.5

Some people think that increasing the cost of fuel is one of the best ways to solve environmental problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion？

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It is true that the crowd of
cars
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 has increased substantially especially during the
last
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 three decades and it
is blame
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is blamed
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 for heavy traffic in
suburb
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suburban
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 areas,
obviously
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,obviously
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 some measurements should be taken into consideration by
government
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the government
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.
This
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 is the main subject of
debates
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debate
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 in
development
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developing
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 countries.
Over using
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Overusing
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of
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apply
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private
cars
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 has got many consequences
such
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 as traffic, air and noise pollution. Nowadays we can see more
cars
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 in the streets
compare
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compared
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 to the past which put some negative effects on individual
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lives
life
lifes
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lives
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 and nature.
Emission
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The emission
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of carbon-dioxide
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carbon-dioxide
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carbon dioxide
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 from vehicles provide several health issues
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 as asthma. According to some data which
taken
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are taken
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 from articles, longevity in the latest century has been decreased in
crowd
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crowded
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 cities where people have spent more hours in
teraffic
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traffic
 jam and they are more likely to become angry easily. It is controversial
problem
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 and I believe that some ways should
taken
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be taken
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 by
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government
govenrment
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the govenrment
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 for motivating the population to use
less
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fewer
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cars
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. There are enormous solutions for
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 significant
problem
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.
Firstly
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,
offer
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offering
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 some discount on public transportation will be useful. Tokyo
encourage
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encourages
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 workers to use buses with free tickets
in
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on
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 specific days.
Second
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, investing money
on
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in
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 environmentally friendly
cars
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 or even bikes would be another possible solution, Netherland spread more than 200000 bicycles in their towns and several videos are created by producers to raise public awareness about
positive
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the positive
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 results of using bikes
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 of
cars
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.
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, If engineers construct wider roads, the
problem
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 of traffic will decrease but we still will have air pollution in our cities,
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 I think it would not be the best solution for
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 issue. To conclude,
over
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the over
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number
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a number
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 of
cars
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 is the main
problem
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in
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is
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in
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 some areas.
Although
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 several factors are lead to
this
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problem
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, serious measures should be taken by governments.
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