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E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the disadvantages of using e-mail outweigh the advantages?

In recent years,
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 has had a huge influence on social communications and
transferring
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the transferring
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 of important information through a digital device. As technology continues to develop, the consequences of its usage
also
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 have arisen.
This
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While
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 face-to-face
communication
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 can be rather difficult
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 some situations, using
E-mail
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 to exchange knowledge and discuss can be extremely helpful and time-saving because the sender and receiver of the
message
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does
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 not need to meet up in real life.
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,
this
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 can assist people from spending money on travel and
destination
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the destination
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 of the meeting.
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, business managers, acting as
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apply
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mailer
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, will not need to travel to a different country to talk with other individuals.
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, using
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 as a medium of
communication
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 allows the content of the
message
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 to be recorded, where people can refer back to the original copy of the article.
This
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 will not only prevent any miscommunication and distortion of the information but
also
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 prevent any arguments that can occur between a person.
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, despite the advantages of using
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, there are
also
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 many issues arising from the usage of digital
communication
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.
Firstly
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,
although
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E-mail
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 provides a wide range of good points, it can make the exchange of facial expressions and emotions very tough. Since
this
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 method of
communication
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 is in a written format, the mailer of the
message
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 may not know how satisfied or unsatisfied the readers are with the
message
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.
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, there could be possible arguments, causing
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 and strains on relationships.
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,
this
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 medium can discourage communities from seeking deeper connections and better relationships because people may feel that it is pointless to strike
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conversation when a significant text
message
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 can directly be sent to someone without the need
of
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for
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 small talk.
Due to
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this
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,
team-working
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teamwork
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 and coordination can fail. In some cases, colleagues may not talk to one another in a
real life
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 setting unless it is important.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly present your main points in each paragraph and support them with more detailed examples or explanations.
coherence
Improve the flow of your essay by using linking words (like 'however', 'firstly', 'moreover') more effectively to connect ideas.
task achievement
Strengthen your conclusion by summarizing the main points and stating your final opinion on the topic more clearly.
content
Your introduction sets a clear stage for the discussion by mentioning both sides of email communication.
content
You provide good examples of how email can save time and money in professional settings.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication
  • professional
  • social interaction
  • efficiency
  • long-distance
  • information exchange
  • organization
  • distraction
  • miscommunication
  • non-verbal cues
  • escalation
  • interpersonal skills
  • reliance
  • personal relationships
  • digital landscape
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