Many museums charge for admission while others are free. do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages ?

In the history of opening
museums
, most of the organisers have benefited their passive income through the years by charging people for
admission
and
items
.
Therefore
, enabling them not only limited to purchasing
admission
ticket
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but more
items
such
as art painting,
merchanise
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merchandise
and sale
items
.
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replica life-size figure. Over the years, organisers have developed a short time plan for
limited
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time for trophy
items
such
as movie prop
items
in their
museums
to be sold at a high price.
However
,
this
is a disadvantage for people who got
admission
for free and defeat its purpose for visiting
museums
that attract customers for income. For
museums
that charge free
admission
does not
neccessary
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necessary
necessarily
comes
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free, because in the corporate world, the sayings
goes
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nothing is free in
this
world without a price.
Moreover
,
museums
earn their profit in conducting events that solely benefit their selfish interest and to preserve an amount of uncontrollable flowing income that feeds the narcissistic individual
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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