Some people believe that children should obey rules and listen to their parents. Some others believe that less controlling will help children deal with adults’ life. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
children
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are expected to follow their
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’ desires and do what they are asked to.
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, opponents of
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idea argue that being more independent during childhood could help them cope with difficulties in their later life.
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there are some benefits of being guided by
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on many occasions, I personally believe that
children
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can develop better if their
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are their supporters, not controllers.
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, every child needs to have
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family for many purposes because they need to be supported
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both financially and physically. Even though having strict
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could help some people to be more organized,
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and disciplined
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and as a result be more successful in their professional, there are a lot of cases that
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negative consequences. These
children
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are always in a hurry and afraid of their actions’ results because they always have to take into account their
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’ criticism. To illustrate,
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with strict and controlling
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tend to spend less time outside with their peers which results in
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of trust and self-confidence. So, all these traumas
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receive because of their
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parents
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behaviors
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towards them affect their decisions adversely in their
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life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhering
  • pivotal
  • instilling
  • discipline
  • fosters
  • stability
  • opposing
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • real-life situations
  • strict parental oversight
  • make decisions
  • autonomy
  • challenges
  • resilience
  • self-reliance
  • stifle
  • personal growth
  • creativity
  • middle ground
  • individuality
  • guidelines
  • authority
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