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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
At present,
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society is becoming a modern association as the technologies have a crucial role in living life and it has been developing continuously for a long period by expertise and a government for
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 to the
next
 generations.
Therefore
, it pursues the mindset of some population admire that we have an opportunity and many approaches which can choose by ourselves. I completely agree
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this
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this
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To begin
 with, technology and innovation are the one of motivation to human beings. As the observation, I consider in education part that we can search
an information
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 easily
in
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 the internet by using the advantages of technology. At the same time, when we have electrical devices in learning at school, university and work, these devices are comfortable and portable in finding
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 whether we are at accommodation or outside.
For example
, children and teachers require whatever they want to perceive for increased competency they can get the documentary and books quickly through an email.
Therefore
, they do not
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 time
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waiting
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 those who transmit the documentary or knowledge and
also
 save much money in
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 a paper.
Furthermore
, they can select
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transportation cheaply as
this
 period has a substantial number of vehicles in
marketplace
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. The advanced technologies are created immediately and easier than
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20 years ago because
human
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humans
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 have acquired
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support from the government in their regions.
For instance
, some people select the
electricity
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 vehicle or is called EV car which
do
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 not need to utilize oil, can use the electricity
instead
 of the oil.
Consequently
, the type of
this
 vehicle can reduce the expense due to increasing
of
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oil
price
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. In brief, people have many choices that are provided
from
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 other organizations for changed
behaviors
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 in
modern
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 era. They should collaborate with other sectors for sustainable development with life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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