crime is a big problem in the world, many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it to what extent do you agree or disagree? give your opinion.

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in the world. The majority of
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no measures to deter the increasing
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. I strongly opine that
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unrational
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irrational
scepticism. By
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rise in
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people
are disappointed about finding a viable way to curb the violations. One of the
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relates to
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of obvious
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the
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crime
, there is no denying that, have a fundamental correlation with income inequalities, motivation for
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out violation and feel
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resentful
of the authorities and government (
this
reason would cause property
crime
).
Furthermore
, we can take the steps to solve the crimes. As far as the solutions of
crime
are concerned, the officials should invest more in
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of
people
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illegal
and criminal actions, rather than, just prevent the
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from happening or tackle with it.
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, by holding
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seminars
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which curb the violent crimes. the
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awareness
of society can be increased, so as to the opportunity of perpetration violent
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being reduced. in
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of petty and non-violent
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a reasonable fine
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be helpful and that would act as much of a deterrent. overall, by rising
crime
rate
, the mass of
people
believe there is no way to curb the
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. I strongly opine that
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this
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they don't properly combat
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feasible
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to control and prevent that. If we continue to follow our negative
view
, in the near future the
rate
of
crime
will increase more and more.
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