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Most people accept that we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extant is globalization a positive or negative development?

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It is undeniable that the
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 at the present time has had changed into modern society, and many advanced technologies are improved from the past, resulting in many
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 thinking that a globalized
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 can crate several positive impacts for everyone, but some
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 think that
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 movement can create many negative impacts as well. From my point of view, I believe that
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globalization can cause both positive and negative impacts on human life. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in the detail. On the one hand, most
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 believe that
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 development can create more and more advantages in several ways of human life,
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 as communication, transportation, innovation, education and cultural connection.
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, many advanced technologies are improved in a globalized
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,
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, many
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 can easily access conveniently many transports, like high-speed trains.
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, most students and teachers can easily create new knowledge and new information, and some cultures around the globe can connect
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 cultures, easily.
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, some
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 believe that these movements can make some drawbacks for their community.
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, many pollutions are caused by
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globalization because the populations are using a lot of resources to make their accommodations and other things, and modern life in a globalized
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 can cause some dramatic problems in the ways of overpopulation and overconsumption.
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globalization can cause an inequality issue in some countries because some persons cannot access
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important materials, like freshwater. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
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 movement of the globe can make both benefits and drawbacks that depend on
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 and context of each person.
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, it is recommended that
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 in a globalized
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 should take these developments to make benefits for their community and other persons. It should be beneficial for our earth.

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