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Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Others believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There are many people that believe that those living in the countryside are able to lead a healthy lifestyle unlike their counterparts in the city.
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, countryfolk may lead carefree lives. The community
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, the atmosphere away from the city is believed to be peaceful and some might even call it serene compared to the bustle in the city. In
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 many are growing
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 with their health. An abundance of food from many
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 worldwide to choose from and
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 of leisure to choose from.
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